-Story Title: 4 out of 5 points. Your title is very sweet! It will attract a lot of attention and it gives the feel that the story will more than likely be a love story. Goodjob on choosing the title.

-Description/Foreword: 3 out of 5 points. Your description is lacking... You gave a very general description of the overall plot of your story and you have no foreword. The description and foreword should be used to capture the attention of readers. Your description and foreword are doing a poor job. Try to add a little more information about the characters. For example, you could put a picture of how each character looks and their age, and other information.

-Poster/Appearance/First impression(ex. Font style, color, pics, etc.): 1 out of 5 points. You have no pictures which is not a bad thing and your font keeps changing. Please try to settle for just one font because it makes your story look disorganized and messy. Truthfully, the different fonts, the lack of proper grammar, spacing, paragraphs, and capital letters, along with the misspelled words can discourage a lot of people from reading your story.

-Plot: 10 out of 20 points. I can't give you a high score here because the plot has not developed a lot. Your story is not long enough for me to analize your plot but so far it seems good.

-Character Development and Dialogue: 4 out of 10 points. Your character development is not bad but your dialogue gets lost among the sea of paragraphs. Again, your story is not long enough for me to judge the develpment of your characters because there is not a lot of details about them. Your wrote

all of thm laughed" but

"Oh, hi I am Lee Sungmin imnida. I am your hyung since I am older than you but don't call me hyung because I am going to feel old if you do." added Sungmin making all of the boys laugh" seems to work better.

Also you could add little details about your characters in many scene. For example when Kyuhyun introduces himself to Sungmin, you could state his age.

-Writing Style: 8 out of 20 points. Your writing style lacks a lot. As I have said, the story lacks proper grammar, paragraphs, and capital letters. There are many misspelled words and the spacing of the paragraphs is bad. Yet, chapter 3 looks better and is easier to read the previous chapters. Aside from this, the point of view of the story is not bad and try experimenting with italics for inner thoughts that your characters might have in the future!

-Flow: 9 out of 10 points. The story has a good flow. It doesn't seem rush and everything that happens in the story makes sense.

Overall enjoyment: 5 out of 20 points. Sorry about the low score but it was hard for me to readthe story. The more you write, the better your writing will become! So keep trying!