Let Me TRUST You - SSZE_A501
-Inu

-Story Title: 5 out of 5 points. Your title is interesting. It doesn't give anything away. 

-Description/Foreword: 7 out of 10 points. Your description and foreword are not bad but it could be better. You introduced the characters and part of the plot but a summary of the story would help you get more readers.


-Poster/Appearance/First impression(ex. Font style, color, pics, etc.): 10 out of 10 points. Our poster, and the whole appearance of your story is great. It is easy to read the words and the poster looks good.


-Plot: 15 out of 20 points. Your plot has been used by other people but not to the point where it has been overused. It feels like you are hurrying a bit but it's not too obvious. So far, you have done a good job.


-Character Development and Dialogue: 13 out of 15 points. The dialogue in your story is good but you should work on the spacing. Some of the dialogue text seems too detached from the other text. The personality of your characters are as you described in the foreword. So good job!


-Writing Style: 8 out of 25 points. It was very hard to give you a score here. First of all, I recommend that you get a beta or someone that will edit your writing. I don't know if English is your native language or not but you have a lot of grammar and spelling errors. The errors make hard to read especially yo pick readers. For example, you wrote 

"Just think the Jotwins as total oppisite to eachother."

Instead of that, you could write: 

"Just think of the twins as total opposites of each other"

I wish that I could point out all your errors but I can't. I will point out that you can use other points of views as long as you point it out to the reader. Not everything has to be in he, or him.


Overall enjoyment: 8 out of 15 points. This was hard to read but your idea is good. As I said, find someone that is willing to edit your story. That person can hopefully fix most, if not all your grammar and spelling errors. That alone may get you more readers and subscribers. Try experimenting with different points of view, you might find that this gives you freedom and enjoyment as a writer.


Total: 66 out of 100 points