~ 100 days with you ~ - chocolatenite

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Reviewer: yiling245

Title: 4/5

Yay! I liked your title very much as it made me curious about your story. The title is intriguing and I liked it. I deducted one mark because you should have capitalised your title. Also, I think that you should just take away “~”.

So it becomes like this: 100 Days with You

Poster: 4/5

The poster is nice and well blended, but a little to red for my taste. Also, I don’t know what the chunk at the bottom left corner of the poster is, so I deducted one mark.

Description & foreword: 6/10

I loved your description! It didn’t actually give away too many details, and the readers (like me) would actually take the time to think about the questions, and want to read on. However, there are some spelling errors you need to take note of there.

Instead of happends, it should have been happens.

For the foreword, you didn’t use it for what you were supposed to use it for, like many other writers do. A suggestion is to write a short summary or a little teaser for your audiences instead of putting your character charts and disclaimer there. Personally, I don’t like character charts which are a little too detailed as they give away too much information on the story.

Plot: 25/30

I loved the plot, and it was really interesting. It was original, although I might have came across a few stories like yours here and there, but you managed to set it apart and I could see the differences in the story.

Kudos to you for that! ^^

Writing style: 10/20

There are many errors in the writing style, including punctuations and capitalisations.

I'll just list one.

Wrong: "I don't understand why girls live him,I mean sure he's handsome and everything but he's a toal playboy and girls know that."

Correct: “I don’t understand why girls like him, I mean, sure, he’s handsome and everything, but he’s a total playboy and girls know that.”

Spelling/grammar: 8/10

The grammar was great, and no big errors anywhere I could find. For the spelling, it is relatively okay, only with a few typo errors here and there. Make sure to check through your work after writing every time!

Wrong: I'm seriously going bersek! I need medication!

Correct: I'm seriously going berserk! I need medication!

Ending: 9/10

Considering that you had a sequel, your ending was great, but the kiss was a little too sudden. But overall, I love the sweet ending!

Overall enjoyment: 10/10

I freaking loved it omg! Speechless.

Total marks: 76/100