In Love With an Idol - FanFicWriter20
-Inu

-Story Title: 5 out of 5 points. Your title is catchy and it attracts attention. At the same, it gives away what your story is going to be about. It is a good title. It let's reader know that in your story, there will probably be drama.


-Description/Foreword: 4 out of 10 points. Your description is good. It tells what your story is going to be about and at the same time it gives an insight to the personality of your original character. In your foreword, you promoted your other stories and that is fine but the fact that it is big and red can be a problem. After read both, the foreword and description, I couldn't remember what your description said but I remembered you promoting your other stories. The foreword takes attention from your description and you are trying to catch the readers attention for "In Love With an Idol." If they like your story enough, they will check out your other stories without you having to tell them.


-Poster/Appearance/First impression(ex. Font style, color, pics, etc.): 5 out of 10 points. The poster is great. Yet your author's notes keep stealing the attention. Try a simple divider line and a different font or color, what you did in the last chapter you have posted is great. There is no need for you to make the font a bigger size than your actual story. Also you can also use italics for the inner thoughts of the characters.


-Plot: 17 out of 20 points. Your plot is somewhat original yet I am sure I have seen more that a few stories where the main character falls in love with an idol, or where they end up as the neighbor of an idol. This plot has been used over and over again but you gave it a twist. It was a little predictable that your character was in love with someone but again you added a twist to the plot which has set your story apart.


-Character Development and Dialogue: 13 out of 15 points. The way that characterize your characters is interesting. Your original character's personality is well-developed. Your other characters are different. They lack a bit of development.


-Writing Style: 22 out of 25 points. Your style is good yet the macros that you shared interrupt the story instead of helping. If you really did want to share the macros, okay but do it before starting the chapter or at the end. Not in the middle because if can throw off your readers. Your story doesn't seemed rush which is good. Try to use italics or something to point out the character's inner thoughts. For example in chapter 4, you have that the character thinks that,

Oh! Isn't he Taemin? I saw him in the magazine! OMGAH! HE'S EVEN CUTER IN REAL LIFE! I want to pinch his cheeks so badly! No! Ae Ri, restrain yourself! You can't freak people out.

Instead, try 'Oh! Isn't he Taemin? I saw him in the magazine! OMGAH! HE'S EVEN CUTER IN REAL LIFE! I want to pinch his cheeks so badly! No! Ae Ri, restrain yourself! You can't freak people out.'

or use italics. Another thing is that the POV changes are so often and you do distinguish them but I don't think it is enough. As I was reading, I kept forgetting who's POV it was, so aside of having the POV underlined and bold try to make the font bigger and you can highlight it. You could even assign each character a color.


Overall enjoyment: 12 out of 15 points. Your characters lack a bit and seem too exaggerated. For example, Taemin is a five year old on a sugar rush and it can kind of annoying. From there, the story good. You added your own twist and it has good grammar a good writing style.


Total: 78 out of 100 points