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Reviewer: yiling245

Title: 3/5

Your title was fairly interesting, and when I first received your request, I actually wanted to read it myself.

Poster: 2/5

The poster is nice, but a tad too plain for my taste. Sorry.

Description & foreword: 8/10

Yes! Finally someone who used the descriptions and forewords correctly!

I deducted 2 marks because your description was just a little bit too short.

I suggest that you add something more to it, adding a mysterious touch or something, instead of just smack oh it’s Yoona’s birthday and people are wishing her happy birthday.

I liked the foreword, as you didn’t actually give out too many details of what was going to happen in your future oneshots that follow. I liked that you separated every wish, and it’s really something that I wouldn’t have thought of. So I gave you a 5 for the foreword.

Plot: 25/30

I loved the plot, and I don’t think I’ve ever came across such an original fic before. Separating the wishes into 5 oneshots is a really good idea.

However, it’s a little cliché here and there, like how a girl would have 5 people liking her at the same time. And like how Leeteuk is her best friend and likes her at the same time, is cliché and that, I have came across many times.

Writing style: 20/20

I am really amazed by the wide vocabulary you have. Kudos to you! There are no mistakes (if I am not wrong) in the story, and I loved the writing style a lot. Even though there wasn’t a lot of dialogue, you were able to portray the feelings of the characters perfectly well, and I could put myself in everybody’s shoes.

The descriptions you used were detailed and expressive, leaving me speechless.

Amazing writing!

Spelling/grammar: 10/10

No spelling or grammatical errors, once again, I am wowed.

Ending: 9/10

I liked all your oneshot endings, especially changyoon’s. ^^

They all ended with someone saying something, and that sentence would conclude the whole chapter proper. It’s often hard to come up with such sentences, and I liked them, so yay!

But in some I find it a little too rushed, so I deducted a mark.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10

Some chapters were just too short! [ Me no like it, I want more! ): ]

Total marks: 85/100